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by Mechalich
05 Feb 2015, 21:46
Forum: EXACTING RULES ANALYSIS METHODOLOGY
Topic: Pale Bark Wood, a Northern Forest
Replies: 0
Views: 1526

Pale Bark Wood, a Northern Forest

So apparently I'm on a bit of a geographic design binge. This is another area/people description designed for the 3e map. This particular forest patch is designed to represent the spot of woodland on the map furthest from Grieve is you go straight north. While this patch appears quite small in map t...
by Mechalich
03 Feb 2015, 21:14
Forum: EXACTING RULES ANALYSIS METHODOLOGY
Topic: Sankur and Iselgin, Islands of the Northwest
Replies: 0
Views: 2137

Sankur and Iselgin, Islands of the Northwest

This is a place and people profile that will, hopefully, be connected to a forthcoming story. This material is intended to be compatible with 3e, as nebulous a prospect as that is, and is tied to a specific location on the 3e map - specifically the two coastal islands in the large tundra bay one rea...
by Mechalich
09 Jan 2015, 20:06
Forum: SAGACIOUS WRITING OF INTENT
Topic: Teacher and Ninja: On Martial Arts
Replies: 1
Views: 1502

Teacher and Ninja: On Martial Arts

This is part of the hopefully ongoing Horakinis & Usui saga that began in Crux of Scrolls . At the moment, due to the (hopefully) immanent arrival of 3rd Edition, all longer works are sort of in a holding pattern, so I'm working on a series of vignettes to get a better grasp of the characters an...
by Mechalich
05 Jan 2015, 18:41
Forum: WHIRLWIND NOVEL METHOD
Topic: Xilanada - Epilogue
Replies: 7
Views: 5617

Re: Xilanada - Epilogue

Hmm…long review time. In some ways it seems kind of foolish, since the stories been up there for a while and obviously things have changed for you as an author since. Regardless I did read all the way to the end and as such it would be discourteous not to say something. Please note that, while criti...
by Mechalich
03 Jan 2015, 21:27
Forum: SAGACIOUS WRITING OF INTENT
Topic: Crux of Scrolls
Replies: 1
Views: 1597

Crux of Scrolls

Author's Notes: This story is a one-shot featuring Horakinis and an OC dragon-blooded character, Usui. Hopefully it will be part of a larger project in time, but the story is intended to stand alone. Questions and comments of any sort are encouraged. =================================================...
by Mechalich
09 Dec 2014, 01:21
Forum: WHIRLWIND NOVEL METHOD
Topic: Xilanada - Unforsakable Birthright Conclusion
Replies: 8
Views: 3410

Re: Xilanada - Unforsakable Birthright Conclusion

I’m going to post a series of brief review notes that I made while reading through the whole story to this point (it would be kind of cumbersome and clutter up the board to go chapter by chapter). I recognize that this story is now quite aged and much of my commentary may have been rendered irreleva...
by Mechalich
08 Dec 2014, 01:05
Forum: SAGACIOUS WRITING OF INTENT
Topic: Heartwarming Mother-Daughter Reconciliation
Replies: 7
Views: 2804

Re: Heartwarming Mother-Daughter Reconciliation

I find the Mnemon voice effective - not sure that she would ever, even in the depths of irony or sarcasm, think of the Scarlet Empress as 'mommy dearest' though. That was the one point that seemed off.
by Mechalich
14 Nov 2014, 00:22
Forum: WHIRLWIND NOVEL METHOD
Topic: Edge of Underleaves
Replies: 11
Views: 1971

Re: Edge of Underleaves

Chapter 12 Resplendent Air 16 RY 765 The tale spun by the sorceress was dark indeed, and it might well be blackest where she was forced to admit to frightful gaps in her knowledge. Tyrant rulers of the underworld, vast ghostly armies, death-twisted anathema, it was all difficult to believe, yet it ...
by Mechalich
14 Nov 2014, 00:22
Forum: WHIRLWIND NOVEL METHOD
Topic: Edge of Underleaves
Replies: 11
Views: 1971

Re: Edge of Underleaves

Chapter 11 Resplendent Air 15 RY 765 It took Bian two more days to enact her plan. At noon she convinced the chief to watch Zuven perform a series of practice katas. Though the soldier was not much of a showman, afterwards the villagers were falling over themselves demanding lessons. Prepared with ...
by Mechalich
14 Nov 2014, 00:21
Forum: WHIRLWIND NOVEL METHOD
Topic: Edge of Underleaves
Replies: 11
Views: 1971

Re: Edge of Underleaves

Chapter 10 Resplendent Air 12 RY 765 Following the conclusion of the evening meal the dragon-blooded pair met inside a shack deep in the rice paddies, away from thirsty ears. Bian had claimed immaculate prayers as an excuse, but devotion did not press upon them. Instead they shared a summary of wha...
by Mechalich
14 Nov 2014, 00:20
Forum: WHIRLWIND NOVEL METHOD
Topic: Edge of Underleaves
Replies: 11
Views: 1971

Re: Edge of Underleaves

Chapter 9 Resplendent Air 12 RY 765 Deep in the shadow of the towering peaks of the Fire Mountains, dawn came late to these forests. The villagers were up well before the sun burst through the high shadows. Zuven awoke with them, rising in tandem with the family hosting him. In darkness he strapped...
by Mechalich
14 Nov 2014, 00:19
Forum: WHIRLWIND NOVEL METHOD
Topic: Edge of Underleaves
Replies: 11
Views: 1971

Re: Edge of Underleaves

Chapter 8 Resplendent Air 11 RY 765 “Stop!” the word was clear in the growing darkness, and yet not. Strangely doubled-over by hearthstone magic, Zuven felt it quiver in his ears. Perhaps a more experienced user of the stone, an expert like Bian, would truly have heard the speech in twining tongues...
by Mechalich
14 Nov 2014, 00:19
Forum: WHIRLWIND NOVEL METHOD
Topic: Edge of Underleaves
Replies: 11
Views: 1971

Re: Edge of Underleaves

Chapter 7 Resplendent Air 11 RY 765 Shrouded by dusk and the many-layered thickness of jungle foliage it was not possible to see far. Zuven scrambled into the lower branches at the advent of voices, searching for a revelatory glimpse. He saw only a general lessening of gloom – the mark of cleared a...
by Mechalich
14 Nov 2014, 00:16
Forum: WHIRLWIND NOVEL METHOD
Topic: Edge of Underleaves
Replies: 11
Views: 1971

Re: Edge of Underleaves

Chapter 6 Resplendent Air 11 RY 765 In thick, trackless woods a river makes for a convenient path and doubles as a source of clean water. These useful traits were not unique to humans, other life found them equally enticing. The water might be only waist deep and the path a handful of yards wide, b...
by Mechalich
14 Nov 2014, 00:15
Forum: WHIRLWIND NOVEL METHOD
Topic: Edge of Underleaves
Replies: 11
Views: 1971

Re: Edge of Underleaves

Chapter 5 Resplendent Air 10 RY 765 The next day began with rain, a slow dripping pummel that lasted all morning. They continued southward, both inured to this and blessed with artifact garments proof against waterlogging. Human trails vanished, and Zuven was forced to make old game trails their pa...
by Mechalich
14 Nov 2014, 00:14
Forum: WHIRLWIND NOVEL METHOD
Topic: Edge of Underleaves
Replies: 11
Views: 1971

Re: Edge of Underleaves

Chapter 4 Resplendent Air 9 RY 765 Cloud forest Bian called it; this high jungle of gnarled trees, pervasive mist, and deep, dark green. It was different from the steamy island landscapes of his youth, cooled by altitude and cleansed by swift-draining soils. In the absence of familiarity the soldie...
by Mechalich
14 Nov 2014, 00:13
Forum: WHIRLWIND NOVEL METHOD
Topic: Edge of Underleaves
Replies: 11
Views: 1971

Re: Edge of Underleaves

Chapter 3 Resplendent Air 8 – RY 765 Seeking the assurance of repetition to calm his nerves, Zuven checked the straps once again. Icil grunted in response, blasting a short squealing exhalation from his trunk; enough was enough. Duly chastened, the dragon-blooded stopped, standing up again. He patt...
by Mechalich
14 Nov 2014, 00:10
Forum: WHIRLWIND NOVEL METHOD
Topic: Edge of Underleaves
Replies: 11
Views: 1971

Re: Edge of Underleaves

Chapter 2 Resplendent Air Five – RY 765 Zuven was directed by a member of the satrap's staff to meet Sesus Bian at the residence of Sesus Alon Carina, a dragon-blooded merchant and artist who customarily spent her summers in the city. The villa in question lay just off the southern edge of the Roya...
by Mechalich
14 Nov 2014, 00:08
Forum: WHIRLWIND NOVEL METHOD
Topic: Edge of Underleaves
Replies: 11
Views: 1971

Edge of Underleaves

This story is posted on Fanfiction.net, but in the effort to potentially reach any readership I might have missed, I'm posting it here. Reviews of any kind are strongly encouraged. This tale features dragon-blooded protagonists and is based, mechanistically, on Second Edition rules. Edge of Underlea...
by Mechalich
28 Mar 2011, 15:32
Forum: WHIRLWIND NOVEL METHOD
Topic: Bows for Thistles, 04
Replies: 0
Views: 1918

Bows for Thistles, 04

the story continues...wouldn't mind a comment or two Chapter 4 6 Descending Water RY 769 Rafan did not sleep long. A bitter cry and terrified screams woke him seemingly a mere moment after finally pulling the sheets over the young lady. He was up instantly, and throwing armor on even as his eyes adj...
by Mechalich
26 Mar 2011, 16:22
Forum: WHIRLWIND NOVEL METHOD
Topic: Bows for Thistles, 03
Replies: 0
Views: 1932

Bows for Thistles, 03

Chapter 3 5 Descending Water RY 769 Rafan dimly felt something poke his side. At least, he thought something did, his whole body struggled with a cloudy haze of diffuse, thudding pain. Did I get hit with a goremaul? He thought fuzzily, mind struggling to determine anything, eyes closed against a fi...
by Mechalich
22 Mar 2011, 20:09
Forum: WHIRLWIND NOVEL METHOD
Topic: Bows for Thistles, 02
Replies: 0
Views: 1890

Bows for Thistles, 02

This is the second chapter of the story. Chapter 2 21 Ascending Water RY 769 “Pass the order,” Rafan called down the line to his subordinate officers. “When they attempt to circle the High Blades we run to the creek and bury them in a storm of arrows.” There were quick nods of assent, it was all goi...
by Mechalich
22 Mar 2011, 01:59
Forum: WHIRLWIND NOVEL METHOD
Topic: Bows for Thistles, 01
Replies: 1
Views: 2065

Bows for Thistles, 01

This is my first Exalted piece that seems likely to go anywhere, so I'm posting it to various venues. Ultimately this is a story of one small land against the seemingly invincible power of the Mask of Winters. Comments are always appreciated. Bows for Thistles “To pull a thistle wounds the hand. A b...